Mum stepped.....

Mum stepped.....

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Mum stepped out of the limo and walked onto the bright red carpet. Mum was so famous that the paparazzi were taking photos of her.

When mum was walking along the red carpet her high heel shoe broke. Mum ran back into the limo and  speeded back home to get  a new pair of high heels.  Fortunately, Mum had many pairs of shoes. Mum felt very embarrassed when her high heels broke. She raced inside when she got home. When mum got inside the children were at  the table drawing and dad was watching a game of rugby on TV. Then  she was hunting for some of her high heels in her closet. Finally, she found a  pair to match her outfit.  Back she leaped into the limo.

The driver whizzed  mum  back to the red carpet. The new high heels were perfect for a walk down the red carpet. While  she was walking down the red carpet she wore a brilliant smile and looked elegant in her outfit.  When mum was at the end of the red carpet she was interviewed by Three news. Mum was on tv and luckily her high heels did not break on her this time. All the time the cameras flashed.  After that mum went back in the limo and went back home.When mum got home her children said, “Mum, we recognized you on tv and saw you getting interviewed by three news.”

Mum flashed her tv smile and headed straight to dad. She showed Dad the award she received for being an inspirational mum.     

Mum Stepped....

WALT: use better words.

Mum stepped out of the limo and walked on the bright red carpet. Mum was so famous that there was a lot of paparazzi taking photos of her.

When mum was walking along the red carpet her high heel brook. When her high heels brook mum ran back into the limo and we back home to get new pairs of high heels. Mum felt very embarrassing when her high heels brook. When mum got home she raced inside. When mum got inside the children was on the table drawing and dad was watching some TV. After that  she was hunting for some of her high heels. When mum finally found some high heels she went back outside to the limo.

When mum leaped in the limo the limo took mum back to the red carpet. When mum arrived at the red carpet her new pairs did not break on her while she was walking down the red carpet. When mum was at the end of the red carpet mum got interviewed by three news. Mum was on tv and lucky her high heels did not break on her. After when mum got finished interviewed  paparazzi keep on taking a lot of photos. After that mum went back in the limo and went back home.

When mum got home her children was saying mum mum we recognized you on tv and you were getting interviewed from three news.